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This is so stupid on so many levels

Last edited on 06 August 2017, 10:08 UTC.

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Any error? The plot...

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The start of the comic doesn't make sense without an overlaying plot describing why Hinata is going to Kushina for help. Also, Hinata at this point would have to call Minato and Kushina "Father & Mother" due to her upbringing and how serious she'd take it.

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So you still plan on following through with this one that's a damned shame good art wasted on shit

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wow
multiple shadow body?

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Damn this guy can work doing double Naruto eros.

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I would hate to have her as a mom. Seriously one of the worse moms ever.

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Page 4: nice >:]

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Can't tell if people are mad over the english, the art, Hinata, or the fact that Hinata is cucking Naruto. I assume the latter two, like always

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@Smarty- The plot and how it all started. Makes zero sense since what it looks to us that we just jumped in the middle of a conversation.

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More pages? Oh no, it's really okay, you don't have to do that. You can stop now.

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@smarty358: I feel like most of us find the art to be pretty good. It's that the english, and plot as a whole, is pure garbage. That's why I feel a lot of people dislike this. If only he sticked to doing the art and had someone else come up with the storyline and english translations.

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Why her name not Hinata Uzumaki yet?

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Damm I like this.

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Eh... ¿Ok?

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I like that swing one，hope more.

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So Kushina is gonna start pimping out Hinata to other men?

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the arts hot as hell but yeehhhh the story is a bit bad. mostly cuz minato and kushina come off as manipulative and rapey.
does it matter a whole lot? nope. porn is porn and if its fappable then no issues. 4 stars cuz hot art and anything with kushina is great <3

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有中国人么

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I CUMMING INSIDE UR PUSSY

Literally shittiest English, shittiest MILF in Kushina, TERRIBLE art and anatomy and holy fuck cuckolding again?

Fuck off. lmao.

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When are we getting the next chapters

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thios is just trash there is no knowlege about Naruto and the Charakters, pls delet this Bullshit

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It sucks to know that you’re still wasting time on this crap your original work are way better

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@greendragon24

If that is a valid reason for deleting this gallery, then 95% of the Naruto doujins on this site should be deleted.

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Ill remember these comments crying about cuckholding when Sunahara does another shitty NTR doujin.

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The language overall feels very stiff and formal, almost comically so. Use more contractions in informal scenarios, such as shortening "you are" to "you're" and "he is" to "he's", and it won't feel as foreign and stiff. Also you're mixing up words like "you're" and "your", but that's more a case of English being hard. Native speakers get those mixed up, too, although it does look sloppy in a professional work.

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His stuff is so ugly when he's not drawing traps. And the "storyline" random, forgettable, who cares.

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婆婆公公调教儿媳来绿自己儿子 .......世风日下啊

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Let's hope that there will not be a cliche here, where Naruto will have a small dick or some shit like that :]

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After the most recent page, this might just come out with a pretty damn good ending. Are they all just sharing their wives? If so, well played Felsala!

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Remind me again; this is to help Naruto and Hinata's relationship, right?

Last edited on 04 August 2018, 02:04 UTC.

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This could've benn better, tbh.

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@RabidTanker, well, at least no cliche with Naruto's little dick, could be much worse. So much time waiting just for this 2 pages....ugh. im sad now.

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I guess it ended up helping. Do the ends justify the means?

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Well, we obviously have an few missed opportunities here.

Like Naruto's shadow clone gangbang and Hinata using her vision to see someone's erogenous zones.

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I LOVE SLUT HINATA, #1 CUCK THOT

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PLOT TWIST: All of the OTHER men that Hinata slept with were actually transformed Naruto shadow clones.

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This is no Netorare! Cheating and Netorare is no the same!

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