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Good CG, but the dialogue and scene progression is piss poor. It'd have been better textless.
(seriously, if writing dialogue, and English, aren't your thing...Either get someone to help you out, or just opt out...)

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@Solipsist please don't discourage the author about grammar or dialogue , i know you didn't mean to be rude, but for me we are the same.. english is not our main language. and i hope you would consider it, i'm new to the erotic 3d art . hope you will understand my side because rendering this kind of scene is ridiculously hard and takes time.

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Ouch, it was written by me. That said I’m not unhappy with the dialogue. You are right about the dialogue progression. Keep in mind, in a collaboration the story and dialogue was scripted blind. Then it’s matched and it’s the first time I’ve done that (I have renewed respect for Mpgrey on this). It was also done quite quickly (less than six weeks-give Marsa some applause on this) as opposed to the often years some of these take...If people are clamoring for a sequel (again ask Marsa) hopefully we’ll click a bit better on this.

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Lovely corruption work. I love both works made by Marsa and that of your stuff I saw on CHYOA and Vampyou. Collabs are hard to do usually and here was a barrier language on top of that to overcome. I would say that the outcome is really good but it does have a feeling as if story you wrote originally required more pages to be properly depicted and Marsa could manage to only render so much in a given time and second half had to be shortened as a result. As a reader i was a bit confused in second half.
At the beginning girl who later becomes succubus introduces herself as Justine but at the end the sister who turned back into human introduces herself as Justine? Its a mistake right?
In the first place why did River allow to revert the one who turned her into demon back into a human? And afterwards why did the two left body of sister/lover alone? Wasnt she important to them?
Didn't the human sister allow herself to be seduced by a succubus a bit too fast? She hated demons so much that she was even willing to attack her demonized sister. It's strange that someone with such a resolve got seduced by the other side so fast.
It's a corruption story so i have a bit of regret that we saw only corruption of River and demonization of sister happened offscreeen at the end... Sorry if i complain too much its kinda natural to be more likely to write about the stuff which confused me. I honestly enjoyed this work and there is never enough stuff with fantasy corruption tags! blue skinned demons are particularly lovely!

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Glad to see you branching out into other things, sir!

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I forgot to add, those of us who enjoy works of Marsa can support him on his Fanbox here:

https://www.fanbox.cc/@marsa

it's 300 yen which is less than 3$ for entire month of access to the stuff he posted there... Well he posts anyway for free on Pixiv as well but you can always chip nevertheless ;P

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Blue, yes you caught a mistake-should have been I’m Eve...added that line late and messed it up...

Blue, as too how fast she gave in, it was a combo of a tainted drink and despair over her sister (who she thinks is dead-police sirens in the distance...). I was a little worried about the clarity of that section.

Anaximanes, I’ve been rather branched. Harriet Cooper here (partnered with Shinra) and I’ve done several scripted comic shirts for Vampyou (posted on buymecoffee.com)..,

Might be interesting to collaborate on a game sometime (assuming your patreons like the idea). I’ve always thought “The Company” would make an interesting game...
https://chyoa.com/story/The-Company.12817

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Love it so far, waiting for what is next.

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Marsa’s works always are excellent, guys you can find his work set on PIXIV and his FANBOX, a patron web just like 'patreon'

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AMAZING job here more please the story is great the art is great jnightshade is amazing !!! thank you for all your hard work on this cant wait for more to come hopefully

AMAZING job here more please the story is great the art is great jnightshade is amazing !!! thank you for all your hard work on this cant wait for more to come hopefully

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Hot ! I will love to be turn...

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