First time translating, let me know where I can improve

can't beat the cock

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@Bogard03
Manga Temple is often avoided when it comes to dialogue, but I'm not saying that to be snobbish or elitist when it comes to fonts, it's just not a very aesthetically pleasing font to use.
For the most part, I really didn't see anything wrong besides minor nitpicks, but that's just from some personal experience and seeing mistakes that I used to make as well. They'll disappear with experience.
Can't complain about the grammar, at least not in a constructive manner beyond inconsistent usage of contractions, or missing punctuation at the end of sentences (which is a stylistic choice, not everyone does it.)
If you're planning on continuining, I do recommend checking out the scanlator school Discord, there's a lot of self-help stuff there for scanlation.
Overall, for a first project? Pretty damn good. Would love to see how you improve going forward.

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>an exorcist enslaved and mind broken by a demon's dick on her deflowering dicking(the demon not even cumming yet)
this what happened when you combined the OP power of the dick with OP power of NTR bad guy

RAW:/s/63a4a1278b/1867076-25

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@Detram
Thanks for the information. I appreciate it. I'll make sure to look for more fonts for more situations. I specifically couldn't find one that fit the moans and such as well as I've seen in other translations.
I will definitely check out the discord, thanks for that.
Appreciate the feedback, I do plan on doing more relatively soon, but I'll fix up the font issue and will be a bit more consistent with my grammar going forward.

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@Bogard03
You asked for advice where you can improve, so here we go:

1. Please use the full resolution images for editing and not the downscaled 1280px horizontal res images that e-hentai creates for viewing purposes.

You can download the full res images with one of the foloowing methods:

a.) Torrent Download if available (WARNING: torrents not always contain the latest or the full res version of a gallery; downscaled torrents normally have 1280x in their name)
b.) Archive Download [Click on "Archive Download" and "Download Original Archive"; GP or Credits required]
c.) The "Download Original" link at the bottom of each individual image, in case you don't want to download an entire gallery. If there is no such link on the bottom of the page the image on your screen and the original are identical.
d.) stay away from aggregater sites like nh. They normaly only copy the downscaled 1280px images from this site.

2. Like already mentioned get rid of Manga Temple. This font is just awful. Free alternatives are: Anime Ace, Komika, Wurmics Bravo, Wurper Comics, you can download them from sites like dafont.com or check blambot.com for their free fonts .
A good beginner font for moans is SF Grunge sans you can download it for free from again dafont.com. It's also worth to browse the the handwritten section to check for fonts for moans that you might like.

3. Here is a small list of typesetting guides you can check out:

https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/the-idiots-guide-to-editing-manga/guide/main
http://www.ruinevil.com/rawr/editguide/index.html
https://quicksandscans.wordpress.com/resources/

I can't judge your translation, but the typesetting, well I wouldn't call it good but it's a solid first try overshadowed by the use of Manga Temple. Itr's something you can build on and imrove by reading guides and practice. I've seen far worse from people charging money for translations.

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Cow tag? XDDDD

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@Ancient-Alien
Thanks for the advice. Tbh I was just using NH downloads and taking off text as well as using paint.net to edit areas of text that went off the borders.

I will definitely download new font. Thanks for the links to the editing guides. I'll check them out and try to follow the guides.

Honestly, I just downloaded off NH, scrubbed the text with white paint brush or black paint brush. Used the eyedropper tool to fix up areas that werent black or white and threw in text as well as I could using paint.net.

Thanks again, I appreciate it.

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