Most sane Marialite story. (This was genuinely difficult to follow at times, please let me know if I made any translation mistakes.)

Please criticize harshly.

Part 1:/g/2551688/de1759dff9/

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DLsite:https://www.dlsite.com/maniax/work/=/product_id/RJ01008898.html
FANZA:https://www.dmm.co.jp/dc/doujin/-/detail/=/cid=d_255258/

I'm not exactly sure what I'm supposed to feel about this.

Base +6, BooPooDoop +4, xoril +7, Pavale +6, DianaPrince -10

Mmm, after reading chap 2 comprehensively, and connecting the dots from chap 1, it does make sense that this is legit the sanest Marialite works that ever comes as of this comment publish time. The story aspect was not too deranged by the previous works' standard, the antagonist if you can say so (I'll use this reference as Sana forced themselves forcibly upon others and their being to get their desire manifest someday) which stands to reason being blinded by solid childhood love a.k.a. Yandere thingy, which is quite okay if I say so (God help me). Although I'd like to review the quality of your translation as per your request to better yourself in this field subject, as of now I don't have quite the time, and personal opinion that I am well versed in English, especially in this subject; structure stuff. No, I am not using a translator to post this comment, but I do quite sense some disparities that linger there within this doujinshi. Though I'd like to ask one thing, is this your first-time experience translating any kind of work before? If so, then I wish you the best of luck in your endeavor; whatever path the future might take you.

Base +4, slimedog +10, mar-bcrle +6, AhKai +5, tester545 +7, dddfffdafuq +5, zykyne +6, BLT123 +13, rockball +6, Redmond_017 +5, olegv11 +6, DianaPrince -10, Valtarg +7

Ah, there's that Marialite that I was expecting. Showed up like a mugger in an alley, like usual.

Base +6, dt1248 +6, AhKai +5, dddfffdafuq +5, frishhh +6, zykyne +6, BLT123 +13, xoril +7, Pavale +6, DianaPrince -10

I'm guessing the goal of the game was mistranslated? Unless in japan "Falling for" is strictly, like, getting a hard on. Seems like the protag didn't lose the game....

Base +6, NekoTaiho +7, the dru one +7, dddfffdafuq +5, taj1994 +6, zykyne +6, xoril +7, DianaPrince -10

Well, the first part was quite sweet, wit no bad ending aboard and I did not expect it at all, it was not Marialite's plot style, whereas in this second part arrives the full obsession and the idea of being in the skinsuit that is going to be pregnant... yes, it's Marialite.

Base +29, DianaPrince +10