finally done, thanks hamu for cleaning and RookieDreams + Artistan for decensoring.
this was technically sniped, but the translation + levelling (+ some of the decensoring) on the other one weren't great, so i went and finished anyway

sequel: /g/2932276/a771541246/

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raw:
/g/2525663/91036d96c6/
https://www.pixiv.net/en/artworks/103655805
https://www.pixiv.net/en/artworks/102554345

some decensoring borrowed from:
/g/2893333/681d0dbdc5/

purchase:
https://ec.toranoana.jp/tora_r/ec/item/040031032357/

artist links:
https://vir.jp/dance_a_key
https://twitter.com/dance_a_key
https://www.pixiv.net/en/users/52780749
https://www.dlsite.com/books/author/=/author_id/AJ065744

"this was technically sniped, but the translation + levelling (+ some of the decensoring) on the other one weren't great, so i went and finished anyway"
And a translation that goes "gyatt damn" and "tight gym wear is peak" is better?
*read the same text bubbles in the other translation*
Wow, it actually is better. Beggars can't be choosers I suppose, but such obvious "creative liberties" still leave a bad taste in my dick.

Base +11, racevel -10

my criticism was mostly about the frequent jp > en translation mistakes in the other one (even if you ignore grammar issues or awkward wording, most pages had at least one serious error)

Base +9