003
OG: ああ
TL: Ahhh!
ED: this is part of his greeting

OG: ニュンニャンハメハメ
TL: Let Mayu have your cock now!
ED: she's meowing at the start and also not that articulate in general here

OG: 今私たちはこのおじさんのペットとして暮らしています
TL: We are currently living as uncle's I mean as master's pets! ♥
ED: she doesn't correct herself

004
OG: ワン♥へっしゅご♥イク♥ペットセックスぅ♥
TL: I love having pet sex with you, master! ♥
ED: missing first half of line

OG: ちんぽ最高♥ドスケベ交尾♥ワンワンワーン♥
TL: Woof! Thank you for giving me a creampie, master! Woof! ♥
ED: she's not thanking him for anything, she's just talking about mating

OG: 種付けおじさんのガルガルのカ中出し洗脳♥
TL: Master has the power to brainwash us by creampieing us.
ED: missing a direct reference to the parody source

OG: これ
TL: Woof!
ED: this is not a bark

OG: おくまんこきもちいいよぉ
TL: Master! You're making your doggy's pussy feel real good!
ED: missing first detail about how deep he's going

OG: ちゅーしれ
TL: Aghhh!
ED: this is not a moan

005
OG: じゅきれ、たまらないんだよぉ♥
TL: As he is truly irresistible to me and I love being his pet! ♥
ED: there is no mention of being a pet

OG: 私もいろはちゃんと同じ染められて♥おじさんが好きで大好きで♥
TL: I'm like Iroha, master's onahole pet who is dyed in his preferences and I couldn't be happier about that!
ED: she isn't talking about happiness, and the dyed part is a literal rewrite of an idiom

OG: ふっとぉ
TL: This feels good!
ED: made up TL, this is a physical description of his cock

OG: ダメだっって分かってても逆らえない
TL: I know that I should be trying to resist master but why should I since master gives me all these wonderful feelings!
ED: she's just talking about being unable to resist, nothing about feelings

OG: んッ
TL: Chu!
ED: this is a moan

OG: あ…あの時はユキが余計なことしれごめんなはい♥そうすればママも…
TL: I'm sorry that I failed to capture Yuki-chan as I thought you wouldn't want her. I'll make it up to you by catching my mom for you, master!
ED: no mention of her own thoughts or capturing

OG: いいよなにチャンスはまだいっぱいある♪
TL: Don't worry about it, there'll be plenty of chances to capture, Yuki-chan!
ED: he's talking to Mayu here and there's no mention of capturing

006
OG: 今は本気で感謝してる♥体だけ大きいあの人とは全然違う本物のオスちんぽ
TL: I'm real thankful to Iroha and master for this as master showed me what a cock from a real man looks like and how to service it!
ED: missing direct references to her husband

008
OG: ちんぽ以上におじさんの力がつまってる
TL: This mask gives a power similar to master's...
ED: the mask doesn't give them powers, it just controls them

OG: 牝を堕落させる雄の力…
TL: And it allows us to brainwash other women...
ED: no mention of giving powers in the raw. this rewrite leads into additional rewrites on the following page

OG: えへ♥いい♥全身喜んでるぅ♥終わっちゃった♥私♥
TL: And nothing what my body felt before compares to having this mask on me!
ED: missing second half of line

009
OG: へッ
TL: Meow
ED: this is not a meow

OG: それがお前らを完全に作り替える全員永遠に俺のものだ
TL: All of you will be my onahole pets forever!
ED: missing detail, they're being remade

OG: おじさん♥ / ご主人様♥だ～いすきぃ♥
TL: Mothers and daughters like us... / We'll make sure they all love you as much as we do, master!
ED: this is just a declaration of love, there's no mention of a grander scheme involving other mothers and daughters

OG: ワン
TL: Haa!
ED: this is a bark

010
OG: 特別にご主人様と私の交尾でシコらせてあげる
TL: How about that I'll let you have sex with me and master's other pets if you willingly answer my question
ED: she's allowing him to jerk off to her fucking her master

OG: 悟くんの粗ちんじゃ絶対できない本物のオスがする本気アニマル交尾
TL: Of course, Satoru-kun's small dick will never be a match for master's real big cock!
ED: missing what Satoru-kun is unable to provide

OG: 悟くんの情けない負けけオス声を聞かせて
TL: What do you say to this offer, Satoru-kun? Will you let me know where Komugi and the others are now?
ED: made up TL. she's talking about hearing his pathetic moans

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When will you retire?

It's evident you're outclassed by a real human being.

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