Helloo! Itscalledpoundcake here, this is one of my first comics
i wanted to make slow burn feminization story so here it is, it'll span several chapters, i would love to hear your thoughts on it and what can be added or improved.

help me do this full time: patreon.com/ItsCalledPoundCake
You can also find me at twitter: @callitpoundcake

Unless it's very necessary info, you don't want to start with an info dump about your characters. It's that whole "show don't tell" thing they tell new writers... You can put that stuff at the end for people who are interested.

English is a bit rough. Lot of its/it's confusion. "Fasten" doesn't mean "make quicker"; you want "hasten" for that. And conventionally, Japanese honorifics are attached with a hyphen, not standalone, e.g. "Kei-chan".

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