Why the rewrites?

Especially since you just keep repeating the same phrase over and over.

The random color page in the middle also sticks out

EDIT: It mostly stuck out because every single bubble had the word "rutting" in it

Last edited on 18 July 2015, 00:59 UTC.

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Updated the text on every page but especially that rut I got into! Thanks again for the feedback lapan. My first intent was to make the story legible, and yes I do have my own preferences. The original tale is just too sadistic for me! I have tried to add hubris and erotic masochism plus ironic subplots. I also wanted to differentiate and develop the female characters and their backgrounds. All of these themes can be found in other Dolcett stories But I have also added some topical social commentary which i expect will make it as irrelevant as a Grimm brothers story in just a few months. So thank you again for your feedback. I have removed the colour page as you suggested . I appreciate feedback that I can act on!

Dedicated to the memory of Rosemary Kennedy a beautiful young lady who just liked to have sex with young men! To end her fun her father had her lobotomized!

Last edited on 26 August 2015, 18:33 UTC.

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Thanks.

My mine probelm with dolcett pics was that it was difficult to read what was written.

So thanks

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