Is this complete? I feel like there are pages missing

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missing Carmen x Kelsie lesbian scenes

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I think Mari's tits on page 7 needs readjusting.

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What? Just because they’re hanging from the middle of her abdomen doesn’t mean the artist fucked up XD

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I guess these two parts are mixed up in the same story.

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Carmen's ass is so big that looks like a dick and pair of balls from the back. Hilarious but still pretty hot.

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It's only been two pages, yet I think Mike's better with both Carmen and Mari than Simon is with Carmen.

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So Simon and can just fuck any girl he mets, and Carmen is okay with this? interest, sztupid from a story point, but lets see if this goes anywhere.

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There are a couple of missing pages betwen 3 and 4, why are you not adding those

Lmao, funny how it became Swinging/netorare out of nowhere

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Damn it, Mike. Why do you have to be the better man?

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if jay would stop drawing his asses like 2 basketballs and make it more naturally thick looking, he would be my top 5 favs easily

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Am i the only one that wants to see simon completely ruin mari?

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Seriously, what is up with the shift in tone present in Jay's works recently?

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@Loki The Flameshield
I'm guessing, since he's obviously gotten comfortable with his own artstyle, he's started experimenting with his writing instead. If he's good at writing, he'll settle into his own style of writing as well. But most artists make for terrible writers. So, if he gets better or not, is anyone's guess.

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The writing isn't that bad, but the pacing is awful. Don't mind so long as the ass is phat though.

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It's really, really hard to tell what's going on in most of these pages. The flow between panels can get confusing, and the dialogue doesn't help much. Page 27 (24 in this gallery) is baffling to me. It looks like the sister opened the door, peeked in, *shut the door completely without Carmen noticing,* and then decided to come back in to give a hug? Not to mention that I have no idea why they're crawling around the house bare-ass naked. If Jay wants to dedicate some pages to character development, that's fine, but I don't think it works to try and have an emotional moment while also presenting overt jerk-off material in every panel.

I think these comics could be so much better if they just worked on page composition, and got the help of a friend or someone to edit the dialogue. Their art has gotten *way, way better* - it's just a shame that I feel like the writing and stories have gotten worse? A simple plot about a university where everyone's a slut is simple enough of a concept to be carried by this level of writing, but as it stands there's not enough skill to pull off a story this "complicated."

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