Very first Domination experience for our couple here ^^”
They soon discovered their roles!

I think a Fair criticism to make is:

The whole characterization is cute and all, but the action and pacing is a little weird. As in, everything feel disconnected or lacking some direction.

If I would recommend something, two things:

1. Give the actions, more than just a single frame for some stuff, they can be crammed into a single page, but this issue could be solved mainly relating it to the next suggestion.

2. I notice your page layout is a bit samey, there's little to no direction to guide the viewer's eye in order to convey the story properly. It looks good, but with some uneven stuff could elevate the quality a few steps forward. don't fear the negative space.

Hope to see more of your stuff soon!

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Seems rapey

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