This was a pretty big project but I think I was hooked after the first Twin Quiet. Interesting paralell here with reality and VR.
As always any support is appreciated.

27/6/21: Corrections

THE TIME HAS COME AND SO HAVE I.

Nice job HeartnSoul32. This one's huge, but I'm glad you saw it through.

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Thank you Heart! You also did the first chapter, if I'm not mistaken, right? Great work.

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YES! Thank you!

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the sex scene is pretty disappointing compare to part 1 tbh. but still good.

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Page 64, "you" -> "your".
Page 66, "its"/"it's" mixup.
Page 73, tense incoherency, "didn't" vs "can't".
Page 74, feels like the dialog is stilted.
Page 78, could use a "that".
Page 122, "it feel" is strange sounding.
Page 126, text going off the page and could use a "has".
Page 143, could use an "of".
Page 145, missing a space.
Page 156, missing period.
Page 167, missing a space.
Page 177, missing a period.
Page 178, probably should remove a comma.
Page 179, duplicate "your".
Page 184, page 185, page 186, missing a period.
Page 190, "it"/"it's" mixup.
Page 223, missing "was".
Page 228, missing period.
Page 236 is a duplicate.
Page 250, should be "obviously".
Page 256, missing period.
Page 260, remove a comma.
Page 263, could use a "that".
Page 277, remove a comma.
Page 290, missing an "a".
Page 296, "anyone", "something".
Page 333, a period is a bit too calm for an exclamation. Perhaps use a question mark instead?
Page 361, "are" needs to be moved.
Page 376, "your"->"you're". And watch the line spacing.
Page 378, "not"->"now".

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AAAAAAA IT'S HERE

Goddamn I love this dude. Thank you Heart for this TL, among your others. Really appreciate them! :D

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Thanks for your hard work. Good job on corrections

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So when is the next one? Can't wait.

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I always knew I had a blowjob and smell fetish, but this made me realize how much tongue reconstruction/corruption turns me on. Must research this further.

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