nice work for a first attempt, thanks for the hard work!
now for some inputs: - typo on page 5 "i'm pervert" - don't use <3 to replace a heart symbol. use the proper ♥ instead. - if you can, don't leave out untranslated words like on page 1 and 2. - while i'm unqualified to comment on translation accuracy, somehow the sentences felt somewhat odd. or maybe it's just me.