Hey, its not bad for a first attempt. Promising idea, and the models are actually quite decent, especially for a beginner. That said, the text -desperately- needs some proofreading, and to be centered better in the speech bubbles. As is, there are an almost impressive number of misspellings. With more practice and polish, this could be quite decent. Don't be discouraged by the low rating this got, take the criticism and make the next one better!
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Posted on 05 January 2017, 05:41 UTC by: RaptorZX3
Score +13
yeah it's ok, but the boobs need to be much bigger! Well that's just a personal taste.