first time

For a moment by looking at thumbnails I thought it was a Korean translation, lol.
Typesetting really needs a lot of work.
A wider font, centered in all the bubbles, not going outside of the balloon border, not too big (leave some white space).
Raw needs cleaning and leveling as well before applying typesetting. And jpg format is not really advised too.

On page 9, 11, 14, 16, 17, 18, 19, 20, 21 there is an editing tool over the picture...wait what?
Did you screenshot an online editing program to do this? :o

On page 9 there are two empty bubbles. And one on page 24.
On page 12 there is an eraser trace on some text in one bubble that erased part of it, as well as six purple hypens over two other bubbles.
On pages 15, 16, 19, 21 and 24 there are bubbles with sfx that are not translated.

Apart from that, the TL looks nice. Okita's speech is a bit weird in some sentences tho, but it may be intended, idk japanese. edit: seems like she's just playing her character.

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thank you i will try to improve

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Text seems fine in and of itself, but yeah formating is kind of a mess.

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Aside from other problems here, I don't understand why you downsized the resolution so much. The original resolution on both of the raws available is much bigger then this. You should always ensure your translated version is in the original resolution.

Here's links to the raws if anyone wants to compare:
/g/1547044/1d26c43f8b/
/g/1546870/9b60bd968a/

The pages here are 800x1200, vs 2000x3000 and 2500x3600 in raws. A massive quality downgrade. Please don't downsize your translations anymore. There's no benefit in doing so, aside from reduced file size and people who want smaller file size can download the resample version.

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Definitely hoping for a reupload with some of the bigger problems fixed.

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Does this mean B9HtUkYLEfS won't be doing the Comic Sans translation he promised?

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Great art! Thanks for sharing this!

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Ulrich with penetration.

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Anyone wants a "nipple pinching" or "nipple playing" tag?

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what kind of editing tool are you using for this? It looks like it was done on a mobile app and then instead of saving the images, you are actually screen-shotting the result?

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@JustHereForThePics
Why would I do it when someone else did? The only reason I did it was because no one else did the first one. I was going to start on Sunday, but I guess I don't have to anymore. I will just go back to translating trashy LNs.

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@dianaeamuscipula
Before you even consider touching another doujin, please read these tutorials on how to properly edit scanlations.
https://www.insidescanlation.com/etc/senbonzakura-kageyoshi/senbonzakura.kageyoshi.net/2007/12/17/intro-to-leveling/index.html
https://translatoranon.tumblr.com/tagged/guide
http://www.ruinevil.com/rawr/editguide/index.html
https://web.archive.org/web/20190406011154/https://fallensyndicate.wordpress.com/typesetting-tutorial/

I'm not going to put another wall of text in this comment, but please read all these guides, learn from them, and apply that knowledge to your edits. A little knowledge goes a long way, especially for improving scanlations.

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Imagine someone trying to defend this.

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Based alterbro, learn from this and keep giving us good porn

edit: did you just take screenshots and upload those instead of saving them? What the actual fuck

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based TL anon delivers

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