https://www.dlsite.com/maniax/work/=/product_id/RJ211273.html

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This is unacceptable translation, just don't fucking post these so someone who actually speaks English can do it.

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I hope no one paid for this shit.

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@flaurne

Don't you need to have (at least) a basic understanding of Japanese for an editor to work properly?

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Looks like this is an official translation from dlsite. https://www.dlsite.com/ecchi-eng/work/=/product_id/RE211273.html

The poor grammar tag requires a comment detailing each mistake, but you'd might as well retranslate the entire doujin considering every speech bubble has bad English, so I'll just do 10.

Page 2
"What? Body is heavy..."
- Should be "My body is heavy"
"I feel warm in my crotch"
- Awkward. Perhaps "My crotch feels warm"

Page 3
"It is a terrible boy to forget me"
- Replace "it is" with "you are" for still stilted but grammatical sentence
"I have always been with you all day long"
- Remove "always"
"I met for the first time!?"
- "This is the first time we've met"
"Is it inserted in the pussy of the woman whom my penis does not know?
- ...What even is this saying? "Why is my penis in the pussy of this stranger"?
"I tried to wake you, who won't wake up forever Please thank me"
- Again, gibberish. Replace the latter clause with "you wouldn't wake up." Also period before "Please," but I think that last sentence should just be removed
"The brain woke up thanks to you"
- More nonsense. Replace "The brain" with "I"?

Page 4
"I inserted because the penis of Shige who was sleeping was erecting"
- "You're penis was erect while you were sleeping, so I inserted it"
"Shige's penis feels good, isn't it?"
- Replace "isn't" with "doesn't"

Last edited on 24 February 2020, 09:40 UTC.

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this should be iilegal!

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