The story of issei who, as a result of Risa's plan, becomes her little sister, Will he manage to return or maybe he will like the current situation. my deviantart https://www.deviantart.com/ron512

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How often do you upload these (chapter 2 and so on) on either this adress or on deviantart??

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How will I write the third so that I have a supply.

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While I definitely see some potential in your work, you should seriously consider getting a native speaker to proof read your work, as some of your sentences are either gibberish or nearly impossible to understand (as in, it's nearly impossible to discern, what you actually wanted to say). I think having someone proof read your work would really help with that, cause as I said, there's definitely some potential there, that gets wasted because of some bad English ;)

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Isn't her name Rias?

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I know my English is a mistake. And most of the errors are really the fault of the auto correction in word, unfortunately I noticed it after writing half of the second chapter, but I will try to correct it.

Base +4, Vonsta +6, Heeto +6, WilsonPersival +6, zykyne +7, Blank_1 +6

A few pages still have Polish instead of English

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You need a grammar checker and most definitely some sentences felt like it's out of place.

This thing had potential, it's just a translation problems right now

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Which pages exactly are there problems with? If I can do it, I'll try to fix it.

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Since I just noticed your comment with the new chapter, I'll try to go through the full comic again myself when I have spare time and let you know any issues beyond the already mentioned Rias / Risa

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Thank , I will try to correct mistakes as much as possible.

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The trans part was a little insensitive

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It's a fetish comic, what do you expect.

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Sadly it doesn't surprise me that the user above didn't follow through on giving grammar corrections... It would be a lot of work. There are errors on almost every page, and even some untranslated dialogue bubbles. In the final analysis, it really killed the comic for me.

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