Hello pervs !
You can find more information about me on my Patreon page: Patreon.com/MrSweetCuckhold

"MUCH BIGGER THAN MY BOYFRIEND - PART 1" : /g/2352928/665ea4065c/

OTHER LANGUAGES:

Ita version: /g/2371306/076658bbcb/

MY OTHER COMICS:

"Your wife will be my personal property - Part 1" : /g/2290513/eb8d73728d/
"Your wife will be my personal property - Part 2" : /g/2330941/e730fcda32/
"That time I lost my fiancée on a bet - Part 1" : /g/2358647/afd501e5c0/

Ofcourse no bro your girlfriend cant cheating on you. Trust her dumbass why always cucked guy chained by ntr chain to some slut but thx to author cucked guy always dumb at least this guy try thinking but went in wrong direction right away. Ofcourse dude your girlfriend not cheating this not hickey this Just something else try find 1000 different reason to justify her cheating ass. Lmao. But later dont forget buy nice comfortable cage for you tiny dick pathetic cuck cuz your pure girlfriend gonna force you to watch how she admit that you nothing more as cuck.

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Here is a bet that the girlfriend will either

A) have raw unprotected creampie sex with the boyfriend when she learns she is pregnant to cover it up

or

B) she makes him watch her fuck and have him take care of the bully's kids every time he knocks her up.

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Very hot. Very good English compared to earlier releases.

I took some time to make some corrections because I liked it so much. Your proofreader did a good job, but it can always help have more eyes on it. It's 90% punctuation.

Pg. 19: contract "You are" to "You're" (to make it sound/read more organic)
Pg. 36: comma before "but"
Pg. 40: comma after "fuck it"
Pg. 52: comma after "come on my love"
Pg. 54: comma after "Alice" (just a suggestion, it sounds better)
Pg. 61: comma after "Mike" (same deal)
Pg. 67: correction "Why do they all say that IN the beginning?"
Pg. 67: exclamation mark after "happen again" (suggestion, for a more firm sentence)
Pg. 81: exclamation mark after "Ha ha"
Pg. 85: contract "I am" to "I'm"
Pg. 91: comma after "Okay" (instead of period)
Pg. 99: exclamation mark after "Ha ha"
Pg. 100: contract "I am" to "I'm" (do it or not, just a suggestion)
Pg. 130: exclamation mark after "Ha ha"
Pg. 136: correction "It's just bad thoughts" -> something else. I can't think of something I like, but "I'm just being insecure", "I'm being ridiculous" or similar.
Pg. 140: correction "had" -> "has"
Pg. 155: correction "but no" -> "no"
Pg. 155: correction "as she usually does" -> "as/like she always does" or "as usual"
Pg. 155: exclamation mark after "Ha ha"
Pg. 156: correction "little cukchold" -> "little cuckold"
Pg. 156: correction "cuckhold" -> "cuckold" (in general)
Pg. 156: correction "Download in 2k resolution of all my works" -> "Download all my works in 2k resolution"
Pg. 156: correction "weekly update" -> "weekly updates" (unless you literally always do 1 update per week, making it plural makes it more flexible)
Pg. 156: correction "Early access on comics" -> "Early access to comics"
Pg. 156: correction "Previews on the next comic" -> "Previews to the next comic"
(All the above are mostly suggestions/small improvements and don't really obscure the meaning, they should not count towards the 'poor grammar' tag)

When ordering people or asserting dominance exclamation marks are very effective. As with what I suggested on page 67. I haven't mentioned all of the instances where they would be useful.
Ellipses, the 3 dots(...) are used a lot. If that's just your style it's fine, but they really are used a lot here.

I'd like to reiterate that it reads perfectly fine now. I only noticed a single thing before re-reading it(on pg. 140).

You deserve your 4+ rating on this gallery.

I hope to see a lot more from you.

Last edited on 05 November 2022, 00:00.

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Thank you very much AtotehZ !
Can I contact you on Discord or by e-mail ?
I'll leave you my discord in case you don't want to write yours here in the comments: Mr.Sweetcuckhold#3523

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part 3 4 5?

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I am currently working on part 3. You can find all the latest updates on my Patreon page :)

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