This is my first translation. I chose it because it's one of my favorite chapters from Girls forM (and in general), and because there was some criticism of CGrascal's translation so I was curious what I might be missing. Having finished, I think the other translation is basically fine but I figured I might as well share my own reading. Hopefully I didn't take too many liberties by trying to make things a little more idiomatic for English.

Title should be roughly "Hopeful Rookie" (ie. virgin kohai turned hardcore femdom)

Please feel free to PM me about any egregious errors or style suggestions. Cheers!

RAW - /g/904167/d4b5b4718b/

CGRascal's usually fair, but with some really, really awkward phrases and misspelled words. It's not on Laruffi levels of deliberately awful to be a jerk, more awkward and still like that even after so many releases.

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Very Nice keep up the good work

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Oh marui does it again with the thicc.

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Is there an anus in the middle of the penis at page 6? it looks really confusing.

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@Trips

Cannot unsee, it looks like it is some separate Penis with it's own legs.

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RIP in peace, manager

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Man, I thought this is "A TRAP" with the contributer of this is named Admiral Ackbar and all

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@Trips, @Mrsuperhappy
It's actually the afterimage of her ass. Underneath the anus, you see the line of her pussy holding the base of his dick.

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RAW: /s/f9f8a6bd83/890828-44
RAW: /s/d765dfe8a2/904167-46
ENG: /g/924616/2212ad3da7/
ENG: /g/1091878/3228cd53a6/ (you are here)
ESP: /g/924715/6c00fb59b0/
RUS: /g/1104745/81ae09bf8f/

Last edited on 26 August 2017, 22:39 UTC.

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>Please feel free to PM me about any egregious errors or style suggestions. Cheers!
NOPE.avi

>she's is
That's a bit too much "is".

And a person that learns fast is a quick learner, not a quick study.

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@Mongolfier
Quick study is a common expression. What page is the "she's" typo on?

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Spit. Very nice.

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The contrast between the girl's happy, seemingly innocent face and her pegging the guy at the same time is what does it for me. So good.

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