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Oblivious to obvious changes.till they burst out into the open (-1)
Ripping cloths. (-1)
No one notices cloths bursting open. (-1)

and transformation story sin count is at 3.

Stoner brownie sickness covering up for obliviousness to situation. (+0.5)

Art 3.5 to 4 stars.

Story not too many TF sins... Yet.
Lets see if this artist can pull off a decent original.

(Please no mind control or can't control sexual urges BS as that would go straight into stereotypical TF garbage story and we have enough of them.)

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@IronHide77777
>Judging TF porn as though it's legitimate writing

Do you complain on pornhub videos about sex scenes and cum shots being overdone? God another couple having sex, be more original

Base +3, Shozo +7, jose1999 +6, Tofu22 -6

@IronHide77777

Well your attempt at criticism goes straight into stereotypical garbage criticism and we have enough of that too, but that didn't stop you now did it?

None of those points you listed are "sins," those are just tropes you don't personally like. It would as ridiculous as accusing the tropes you prefer in TF work to be "sins." Tropes are a mater of preference, and none of them as presented here in any way are any less more implausible or inconsistent with the rest of the story then the act of the TF itself, you are just grasping for things to make your complaints concerning your personal preferences look like legitimate criticism – it isn't, none of it is.

Here is an interesting thought, if you don't like the standard offerings, try making some of your own. Don't tell me you don't have enough time, because you clearly have more then enough time to waste hunting out and complaining about things that don't meet your personal tastes, and doing so in a long-form fashion where you try (and fail) to make it look like a legitimate criticism. If you need help with the art there are plenty of artists who draw TF who can be commissioned for relatively little money. If you don't even have that, then seriously what are you doing with your life man?

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I really like the sudden switch from rough sketch to full color and back. It's aesthetically interesting and draws attention to the beat of silence before the transformation begins.

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