Posted on 09 September 2018, 13:05 UTC by: mutopis
Score +6
pg 5, "Nico-chan is in a higher year", maybe "Nico-chan is a year older" pg 5, "it's necessary tilt the face", "it's necessary to tilt the face" pg 10, "Eli and her", who? would sound better if it said, "Eli and Nozomi"