cleaned by kitsume25

translated by SquigglesJP

cleaned raws:
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I was about to cum then "OCHINCHIN" Happened it reminded me of filthy frank videos and couldn't finish lol

Base +7, MegaPerv333 +10, Grimz +7, nurd +6, Zippy8k +7, kanoon48 +6, Hakrei +28, Xalren525 +6, Vivi1993 +16, Boomer30569 -6, blackpillow +8, cronur +11, Mirten +6, and 10 more...

Excellent niece-st, great artwork, succulent sex scenes and a relationship that gives more material for future sequel works.

Only part i kinda dissapointed: no real breeding here... and use of sex toys which arent really needed with that hot story.

Excellent anyway. thanks.

Base +27, cronur -11, ChaseRaph69 +3

Some big and small criticisms for you, if I may:

I'm aware the translation isn't done by you, so you, as an editor, should fix spelling errors and improper capitalization (e.g. karin > Karin). Punctuation at the end of each dialogue box is also good practice, even if the script or if the original dialogue doesn't end in one, interpret the mood and context to apply one.

As a typesetter, you should apply stroke (outline on text) on text that's overlaid on the page art (not in a text box). Fonts should be consistent for each character (augie is used here for... SFX? Oji-san? Karin? All the above?)

Minor nitpicks:-
- Make ♥ not <3.
- Font choice (personal preference here, handwritten fonts for SFX, uppercase fonts for general dialogue). It seems you've been doing this for years, please consult a fonts guide (other than The Complete Idiot's Guide to Editing Manga. In fact all your fonts seems to be from there. AnonBlack's font guide is a good resource.)

I hope this didn't come across as mean spirited.

I just want to fap.

Base +6, Darksword696 +13, RyuuHawke +6, Vivi1993 +16, TheGoubert +6, Boomer30569 +6, blackpillow +8, allelujahhaptism +6, savint +6, KagamiShugu +9, Rendaci +6, RefinedFapper +6, Daddyfatsack +6, and 3 more...

Mueh.

1. No virgin blood when she was deflowered. (what the hell?)
2. He removed her panties for some reason, so there was no sexy panties aside sex.

overall, these two things seriously lowered the score for this story.

Base +7, Not Benedict -6, kavinh -6, Terithius -11, kazumonogatari -6, phoenix169 -6, Kuro Yuuki -7, BestSociopath -6