I recognize those outfits. The 3 girls on page 6 look just like the 3 protagonists of Les Nombrils (The Bellybuttons) https://upload.wikimedia.org/wikipedia/en/3/36/Spirou_3802.jpg
Quality stuff! I wouldn't run from the herm; I'd welcome her with open arms! What I would pay to have her in my bedroom! Is this something that'll be continued? Looks nice!
Were going see some futa on female! Preferably, I want to see Denise stick her dick into Jenna's pussy!
Base +2, jenna69 +7
Posted on 28 October 2019, 04:30 UTC by: TheGoodGiggle
Score +11
This is not very good at all. Neither the art nor the dialogue is, reasonable.
But the real gripe I have, is that I can't fucking fap to this shit! Look at the art for more than 2 seconds. Everything is like clip art or something. And the artist keeps foreshadowing panels in a background layer of the previous panel. And the actual characters. Circle boobs, hyper zoomed in on ONLY what the artist feels you would want to see probably as a disguised for lack of technical skill. But the part that bothers me the most of all of this. Dialogue, not even really so much what is said. BUT THE UTTER CONTEMPT WITH WHICH IS IS VISUALLY ORGANIZED. It's claustrophobic and confusing. I don't understand at some points whom is saying what to whom, and what the intended flow of dialogue is intended to be. And this issue is made even more glaring with the autistic paneling. The eye is confused and doesn't know how to read the page.
My tips. Use more panels, less dialogue per panel. Take your camera angle further back, and yes that means you have to try harder when drawing your characters. And for the love of this craft. Actually make your characters expressive facially and in their sexual ecstasy. I have not once in my decades of erotic media browsing ever once found such a lazy phoned in published work outside of the generic porn industry. And at least then those artists have the excuse of "actors" sucking at it, because they are porn actors. You are an artist that wants to please generousness fans, and I feel they deserve much better than this!
I usually don't have negative criticism of even sloppy self published work. But I have never seen such a highly rated dumpster-fire. Artist, if you have any passion for erotic comic media, and you read this, take my words as gospel. I know you can do much better with little more effort than what I see here.
Base +4, cii09 +7
Posted on 28 October 2019, 09:31 UTC by: TYFComics
Score +13
Dear TheGoodGiggle,
I am sorry that this comic did not do it for you and appreciate greatly your input. I hope you can find other products out there that will work for you as this one clearly did not.
Also, I need to say that regardless of what you think of this comic, It takes dedication, time and hard work. I don't do it because people "deserve" it, I'm doing it because I have fun making them. If you like them, join the fun and if you don't? Just go elsewhere. No harm done.
I will agree with you on one thing and it's the only thing I have in mind while I draw the next project and it's that I try to put more effort on every page I do.
best regards,
-John North
Base +6, cii09 +7
Posted on 29 October 2019, 04:33 UTC by: Ajarsecret
Score +11
Finally! A scene where Don is screwing Denise who is screwing Jenna! I wonder if Denise can get herself pregnant...