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brub you need a proofreader asap
thx anyway

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I agree that you need a proofreader -- but not because of grammar issues. You need one to make the dialogue "flow" more naturally.

Here's a "fixed" example of the first page:

Panel 1: Ugh... The price of vegetables went up, and we're a bit tight on money this month.
Panel 2: Hello, miss. What are you doing?
Panel 3: I'm looking for something to cook for dinner.
Panel 3: Really? I'm actually about to go and have dinner myself.
Panel 3: Would you like to join me?
Panel 4: It's an Italian restaurant. Don't worry, I'll pay.
Panel 4: Eh, really?
Panel 4: Of course!
Panel 5: You see, I work as a producer at an office nearby.
Panel 6: As long as I submit an expense receipt, there won't be a problem.
Panel 6: Wow! What kind of man are you? (I'd rather use "Wow! You're amazing!", but I haven't seen the raw itself.)
Panel 7: Also, since I'm a good guy, I can introduce you...
Panel 8: Sis!

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Another example of someone who can't speak English for shit trying to translate shit into English. Why won't you people just stop?

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Thanks for your work, RedLizzie89. Looks like it's your first upload, and it could use some editing and a proofreader probably like people said. There's also Korean still left some times. I'm guessing you translated it from the Korean work.

It's also not the full work, there's more with the desk scene and later with her little brother, etc. Probably want to add Incomplete to it.

Big fan of Chinjao girl and this work especially. Thanks for working towards a good translation!

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Well, you probably need a proofreader and an editor. Aside from that, good job!

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I hope it is complete
And also that better (I like this artist very much) I hope to see more translations of this artist

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Hi there every one, I greatly appreciate the criticism. I understand that the translations are very crude/bad, that is a side result of me not being plenarily fluent in Korean, I only have basic fundamentals and had to rely somewhat on a translator. I will try to find a proofreader to help as I finish up this work, which will be coming in a few weeks. Thanks for all the support

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