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This could be good

just please don't devolve into netorare

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@hjerry
Look who's comic this is.
I will genuinely be surprised if that doesn't happen, pretty much the guy's gimmick by this point to employ faulty logic and beyond poor reasoning to make Hinata cheat on Naruto.

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ENOUGH!
Naruto can make a nations worth of clones to fuck the brains out of hinata. The fact that anyone thinks Naruto is "lacking something" is a fucking retard.
In fact Im surprised there is not an entire genre of waves naruto clones literally fucking everyone on he battefield.

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the good ones are really rare this is one if them a Good art and it could get really godd only with NaruHina they would never cheat on the other

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Please just keep it NaruHina this is hot.

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Hinata got collagen injections.

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So far, I'd give this doujin a 8/10.

Cons:
- Grammar could be worked on, but that's forgivable, since you said yourself that it's not your first language.
- The story seems to jump to one scene to the other too quickly. Sure, I guess you can say that it's a compilation of sexy scenes, but even so, a slight transition would still make it better. If you have the time, patience, and money (I guess), I would recommend trying to write out a full script (if the plan was to make it into a series of some sort.)

Pros:
- The art is decent, and I can tell that you have potential to get better.
- This has potential to become a series. Whether Hinata keeps "torturing" Naruto with sex, whether she moves on to doing Boruto, or she becomes a complete slut and goes for any cock she can get her soft hands on, this has potential to go in any direction. Whether this turns out to be an NTR doujin or not, I'm still looking forward to more pages! (Not that I'm saying that NTR's bad. Actually, it's kinda my thing. ^^)

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Looking forward to the next page soon. Happy Drawing, and thanks for your work!

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Not really digging the art, but let's see where it goes further

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and apparently the infinity fox chakra have reached the limit!

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Pure BS, you are gonna tell me the Hokage, probably the strongest ninja in Konoha cant continue? You want us to believe Kyubis chakra has reached its limit? Come on, cut that crap and let Naruto gang bang his wife with lots of clones.

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He can't because he just got animal crossing on Switch and he wants to play some more.

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Good job dude just don't go the ntr route, just fix Naruto make gim use sage mode, nine tails chakra or something to go full power lol

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