Hey is my first expérience pls i need to criticize to see what is worth what is wrong thank you!

It could be better if it is siza difference. P17-18 looks a little bit strange
Also big belly is a good option.

btw, what game or software did you use to make this?

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Ah, of course. The magic "I pass through anything" skirt. It's always lovely seeing them defy the laws of physics.

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Few things that might make the transformation seem more consistent:
Reduce the base size of the target, still sexy but less volume
Increase the overall size of consumer after
Spread the volume out a bit here and there, so the mind of the reader can imply some sort of conservation of mass.

Sounds silly, but artist who can pull it off elevate their work tremendously.

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For a first it's pretty good, feel like there was a lot of build up though and then it kinda felt rushed through the good stuff
14 pages of build up ~6 pages of the "vore" stuff/part and then the absorption only went for 3 pages.
Would be better to stretch those parts out a bit
Otherwise great work

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I liked it. really good for your first time. I think it would be nice to have a before and after page, and perhaps a few pages to show her next target (even if you never actually do a sequel).
I tend to like it when the transformations happen in smaller increments (1 person might only be like 1 cup size and some hip swell, or some such) usually based on the dominant trait of the prey. this also benefits from more story progression, what tricks can she use to get people alone, people's reactions to her changes, possibility of getting caught, etc etc
of course the main point is still the absorption process, but I think you get my point.

this is getting into some fetish shit but here goes. I usually like absorption because it increases the beauty/intelligence/other desirable traits about the woman. but in the end, the ultimate purpose, is to impreg her. sadly most vore/absorption don't include men (or futa; preferably also desirable aka big dicks) . but my imagination usually fills that stuff in. point is, its nice when the author does stuff with that. maybe even throws in a happy ending of some kind. (wedding, litter of kids, family, belly full of cum, etc)

Base +7

It's pretty good for the first time, it is just kinda weird though without showing much of a bulge

Base +5

the proportions could use to be spread out a little better, and the skirt's clipping needs to be fixed. other than that you've got a pretty solid basis

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