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Could use a bit of proofreading, but not a bad start.

Base +8, Fallen_Prince +6, liberius +6, ghostvortex100 +6

Should this be labelled “ongoing”?

Base +6, MrAndersonAlot +6, liberius +6, sexyhotasian +10, taj1994 +6, ghostvortex100 +6

It need more attention on the order of the text bubbles, some times is difficult to understand the order.
And if it's divided in chapters, better put the numbers on the break pages.

Base +5, Cadoc69 +8, gonfrankyfreaks +11

Agree with Ciano21.
In western comics the order is usually top to bottom, then left to right for text bubbles at the same height.
If you read this comic like that, the conversations in some panels don't make sense.
Reading it from right to left, like a manga, doesn't always make sense either, though.
The overall quality seems to be improving though, and I always love a MtF comic, so thanks for creating this!

Base +11, taj1994 +6, Cadoc69 +8, METALLBITEN +6, talik101 +6, demeaener5 +12

I hope this isn't just transformation and then end, like almost all comics in this genre. They all need a good amount of sex or its pointless.

Base +6, saj0043 -6, Conspicuous +8, Ertle2 +6, Cadoc69 +8, RecliningMan -3, Serena Lea +7, Quasi-Evil_Overlord +6, Mudswater +4, Deetr +18, ghostvortex100 +6, Guimond +6

the last 4 times this was updated it was just to change the cover.

Base +6, saj0043 +6, atlantismaniac +10, Ouroboros186 +6, Quasi-Evil_Overlord +6, Eowen Earondel +6

I adore !! Really good start, I want more! Perhaps one criticism like the other reviews is the text bubbles, but otherwise it's really great! Keep going like that ! ^^

Base +2

To paraphrase an old lady in a fast-food commercial... "Where's the porn?"

Base +6, gonfrankyfreaks -11, tfFireT -1, Derra +6, rustycruz +6, ChoppedSalad +7, aliasname +6, mdk101 +6, machinman +25, Quasi-Evil_Overlord +6, foursquare +6, ghostvortex100 +6, shadowkazumanic +6, and 2 more...

awesome start to a great story/series

Base +6

I wonder how many people Evelyn has done this to, and who eats or drinks after brushing their teeth?

Base +6

@Senkoau <_< >_>

*walks away whistling*

Base +1

Bump, bump, bump, one page at a time, almost every day. It's becoming gratuitous and tiresome. Keep going like this, and people will start likening you to MeowWithMe.

Seriously, it would be better — for both you and your readers — to post a chapter at a time.

Base +8, saj0043 +6, Kael Hyun +10, Ouroboros186 +6, Quasi-Evil_Overlord +6, Eowen Earondel +6, jehaknaboom +25, ciqogire +5, EagleHolden +6, atlantismaniac +10, foursquare +6, KCzz15 +18, ghostvortex100 +6, and 2 more...

are you gonna spread them eating over 20 more pages now?

Base +3, jehaknaboom +25, Ouroboros186 +6, saj0043 +6

@No Bitches Looks more like 8 pages. This is a very slow burn.

Base +1, saj0043 +6

Need at least some spice... These updates are really nothing and too slow to develop.
It is very difficult to spend money on you Patreon page without something to get our attention.
With that said the art work is pretty good, but, inconsistent (e.g., her face should look more glamorous or exotic instead it reverted back to her secondary change.
Still quite slow and not much to assess other than some light T&A.

Last edited on 12 June 2024, 19:03.

Base +10, Ouroboros186 +6

This comic gets a lot of updates and nothing ever happens. the covers are also misleading the cover never matches the plot of the story. Can we get some heat or will something happen anytime soon this is starting to drag on Melissa N style

Base +6, gloeptor +6, Fraesmat +8, Eowen Earondel +6, rustycruz +6, saj0043 +6, foursquare +6, Ouroboros186 +6, loverlover +6, paTMup +7, ghostvortex100 +6, peanut2222 +6

A lot of these TG comics have no sex. Usually come in bulk too because somebody found a previously unknown or ignored artist and flood the site. I’m not against the comics and actually have few things I won’t look at here, but these are terribly boring most of the time. I have a lot of black listed artists and uploaders because of this and similar things.

I really shouldn’t type half asleep. 😅

Last edited on 22 May 2024, 20:40.

Base +6, foursquare +6, Conspicuous +8, Ouroboros186 +6, talik101 +6, loverlover +6, Deetr +19, Woody Pack +6

The worst crimes 3D comics make is having no panel composition. Everything is just a big page and huge exposition 😭

Base +6, Ouroboros186 +6

It's long, very long, nothing interesting happens, no transformation, no sex... well I remain optimistic because it remains good character development

Base +3

No sex in this sex comic.

Last edited on 27 July 2024, 22:38.

Base +1

Did the gender change even happen yet? I'm not here for sex, I'm just here to see the cock turn into pussy and see some titty growth.

Base +6, talik101 +6

@The_old_hunter

The gender change happened between pages 18 and 19. It happened "off-screen" so there was nothing to see.

There's some additional growth starting on page 108, but it's not worth the slog.

Base +8, talik101 +6, Roden100 +2

This comic has the worst pacing of any fetish comic I've read... Its so off pace the thumbnail to promote the comic has been brunette for almost 2 months now yet the actual comic has only progressed 15 pages and still the same blond chick lol what is happening here.

Base +6, Ouroboros186 -6, FieryGT +6, wertzu2112 +6

Nice plot and fine art!

Base +6, Salmacius +6

Still not moving along and the "conflicts" are not moving either. The art is pretty good and the story is not bad, but taking too much time to develop.

Base +10, wertzu2112 +6

Great images! They're a canvas of imagination

Last edited on 18 July 2024, 17:36.

Base +1

I dont understand the point of this comic personally, or at least based on the tags... It's quality work, but the plot/fetish stuff is almost non existent.

Base +6, ghostvortex100 +6

Pretty sure this is just a ploy so the uploader/artist can farm points for the site. Better off ignoring/blocking them.

Base +6, opk9 +6, Kael Hyun +10

462 images in and we finally have a sex scene. I REPEAT, 462 images in and we finally have a sex scene!

Base +2, nnaadd +6, DjUlt +8, EagleHolden +6, taj1994 +6, wertzu2112 +6, abakan94 +6, Vanchini -4, ghostvortex100 +6

As a professional writer, this script (such as it is) reeks of fannish indulgence. The story so far could probably be reduced by 50-60 percent without losing anything. If a story needs to get a group of characters breaking into a compound, up and over a roof, you DON"T describe the actions of every character as they climb up, cross the roof, then climb down UNLESS SOMETHING IMPORTANT TO THE PLOT HAPPENS.

Thus-
Green team made good time, and arrived at their target a few minutes early.
"Do a quick double check on your gear" the Chief said.
"Aye!" echoed the muted chorus.
"Clemmens. Can you make that upright?"
The Ranger eyed the short pipe st the roof's edge.
"No problem, Chief," Clemmens said. He tossed his grapple up, which settled with a solid "thunk!"

Eight minutes later, Green team were over the roof, and in the enemy compound,

Base +7, ghostvortex100 +6, bluemandc +6, Kael Hyun +10

I would end it and start another comic. We won't make any progress here anyway. Just a boring soap opera.

Base +6

I don't want to be mean, even if I'm looking at another DAZ guy, so I'll try to be constructive.
You should really think more about efficiency, it would really improve the pacing. Example:
>they get into a car
>we get a car ride scene that does nothing except inform us of the car ride taking 30 minutes
>the arrival page to start the party scene restates that the ride took 30 minutes
>the duration of the car ride then turns out to be superfluous information with zero impact on anything
What exactly is the reason you put that there?
It seems to me you had them get into a car and went with a car scene because you saw enough media do it and are familiar with the pattern that this is a place where writers insert car ride scenes without considering whether you should put one. The reason a scene like this happens is usually because it's an easy way to get characters to exchange information, impacting which character knows what and providing exposition to the audience ("so let's go over the plan one last time") or providing insight into their feelings through small talk ("you nervous about tonight?"). If there is nothing to convey in that scene, cut it. It's a series of finished renders, not a videogame, we do not need a diegetic loading screen.

You have a general tendency of putting text on screen unnecessarily that just restates exactly what's going on in the image like "he started glowing while asleep", "he now looked more feminine" or even "he turned and walked towards the shower." In a novel, you have to tell me that he enters the shower (within reason, if anything happens in there). In a visual medium, you do not. I can see that he's getting into the shower, I'm not blind, and if I was, your text box wouldn't do me any good, either.
Darkstar50 has pointed this out already, and I'm fully with that, the example paragraph seems a lot more readable and interesting to me already since every line in there either gives me information about what is happening or meaningfully furthers the action so I'm feeling like there's action and development. Since you're doing a comic, you can actually cut down on text even more, since the rope getting hooked to the roof would be shown visually, perhaps with the "thunk" as a sound effect text. Showing and also telling me should be cut back on, as seeing and reading every piece of information twice or more is the main cause of your pacing problems.
This also bleeds over into dialogue. On /s/45f7660ede/3042823-190 "I heard you talking about Boutiques" is a really weird line as if she overheard a conversation she was part of herself. We saw her seeing them talk about it one page earlier, you can trust us to have a short term memory that lasts from one page to the next.
You're using a visual medium, capitalise on that.

Further, please give your speech bubble location some thought. I have to figure out the order of dialogue based on the text far too much in this entire work, it feels much more natural and ergonomic to read the dialogue in the right order from the get-go. I'm sure there are a lot of resources out there that can help you with that. Search something like "comic speech bubble order/layout" or something like that in a general web search or YouTube or something, you should be able to pick up a few general principles that would vastly help.
Looking at /s/715825b301/3042823-32 for example, changing Oliver's bubbles' position would be far superior, especially the "yes", and "just switch speaker whenever a bubble is over" doesn't apply consistently throughout this gallery so it can't be relied on, and then /s/715825b301/3042823-33 is just a complete mess. How and why you decided to put Marcus' text to the top right I do not know, but that position does NOT in a million years translate to "read three of Oliver's bubbles first, then this is number 4/5" so he just blurts out "who's Evelyn?" nonsensically on first reading, before you fix the scene in your head.

Finally, every scene is nearly or entirely empty except for characters with speaking roles, including party and nightclub scenes. Feels a bit weird.

Base +3, mar-bcrle +6

i'll speak for myself here.

i started reading this when it was just 1 chapter, but i'm not going to be going further with this, for one main reason- long comics are hard to get into and unless there's some sort of storyline that is good enough to warrant a comic that's 2 or 3 tpb book's worth of material it's not worth stringing out the story because at that point the entire thing gets boring. and looking though the comments others are saying just as much.

it you do plan on continuing this series, perhaps end this one as a part 1 and start a new one as a part 2? epics need to be broken up just to maintain some casual interest.

Base +7

To most people here..
Why so serious?
No one forced you to read this.
If you don't like this, you can always go read other things in other places.
Most of you rude people seem to be "macho" Men, who only get turned on by Men turning into women, to then fap to that newly "pussified" Woman. Most of you rude people don't really want something like this to happen in your Life. Do you?
Why kill the Talent and Heart of the Author with your extremely harsh words?
Your Suggestions are also strange. "I would stop here." Or "I would start another Chapter now."
NO ONE FORCED YOU TO READ THIS.
Be kind to others. You have nothing to lose. If they are happy about it, then they will be kind to you too.
Or if you have nothing nice to say, then it is always acceptable if you stay quiet.
Now we will never know what the Author planned for Olivia and his/her Relationships. Now will we?

I, for one, liked this till now. Although it was slow, the Building-Up of the Story and the Characters was good. I hope we get to see how it ends.

Base +2, MedNed -6

@LonelyLoner1989

I think most are genuinely trying to help the writer/artist get better. Artists/writers have a tendency to get stuck in a certain way of doing things that seem right in their own minds. That's why they, like scientists thrive in an environment where they are tested. Artists/writers that can't handle that simply don't go very far.

Base +6, Willow Tindersmith +7

Not bad, just a poor plot-to-porn ratio.

Base +6

@W1slicer oh really?
Oh is it like the sarcastic Kind of Encouragement?
Saying something like "Oh you little Shit" but trying to mean "You beautiful Diamond!"...? Is it?
Well... I rarely get sarcasm. But, positive Encouragement almost always helps.
Let's stop this Discussion.
No one Changes for the better. People only get worse.
Anyway..
All the best.

Base +2, MedNed -6

Why do I have a feeling Evalyn is going to do something to Jamie or Oliver given her previous actions.

Base +6

Written and directed by Tommy Wiseau

Base +6, MedNed +6