rewrite

Tanaka aji all over, retard goes on NTR blog, then gets NTR'd then turns into vegetable. End

Base +15, elgigante +6, pollaco +9, marconii2002 +10, cAntW0 +7

engrish much

Base +13, elgigante +6, r8221 +7, pollaco -9, Zero Angel +36, bucket90 +2, Toot Oriole +7, marconii2002 +10, The Noodles +7, T_Starrk +8, flamedance58 +9, lyle15 +9, danixxx +30, and 8 more...

This is bad, even by rewrite standards...

Base +14, elgigante +6, NetorareLover +6, korvinnomaru +5, deuce22 +10, CreeperClaw +10, r8221 +7, pollaco -9, Zero Angel +36, bucket90 +2, hurpa +9, Toot Oriole +7, marconii2002 +10, and 28 more...

Why is this tagged english?

haha pollaco doesn't like my comment.

If you are going to do a rewrite at least have someone proofread it.

WTF! He even forgot the first page and last page!

/s/1f68577592/434024-132

Base +8, pollaco -9, Zero Angel +36, bucket90 +2, Toot Oriole +7, LipLol +12, r@ndom +6, flamedance58 +9, r8221 +7, Baelfael +10, kurt303 +7, homogenized +10, distels +6, and 9 more...

Anyone happen to know what this comes from? the god awful dialog is such a buzzkill

Base +11, Zero Angel +36, bucket90 +2, Toot Oriole +7, Sancho_Panza +14, danixxx +30, kurt303 +7, homogenized +10, pollaco -10, distels +6, mojomunkeez +16, Sherlockian +8, bushwhacker2k +6

/g/434024/585947a935/?p=6

raws here, pg 132

Base +8, bucket90 +2, nimea +8, qwopqwop +9, homogenized +10, Maximum_Joe +30, pollaco -10, distels +6, mojomunkeez +16, skeksis +9, Marzzel +5

So bad. But so many good places to crop for images.

Base +11, marconii2002 +10, pollaco -9, homogenized +10, mojomunkeez +16, bucket90 +6

Original story seems to suck as much as the rewrite, I don't see the problem.

Base +7, marconii2002 +10, TheZeroV2 -6, deuce22 -10, Danman -9, kurono -13, msrat -7

No sir i don't like it.

Base +11, homogenized +10, pollaco -9, mojomunkeez +16, bucket90 +6, skeksis +9

Sometimes I think that rewriter muust be hanged, evicerated and then burned... this guy just refuted this opinion
God... rewrites must be prohibited by ToS...

Base +6, Rain18 +7, Killer_Kittens_Klub +8, pollaco -9, robnovem +9, homogenized +10, mojomunkeez +16, bucket90 +6, skeksis +9

lol. nothing makes sense anymore.
What am I fighting foooor!!!

Base +7, pollaco -11, bucket90 -6, trinitity -9

What is this shit? Not only is the story shit to begin with, the English writing gave me a headache. Whoever did this needs to explode.

Base +1, homogenized +10, pollaco -9, mojomunkeez +16, bucket90 +6

This made me sad. I like Netorare. The translation made it much less hot.

Base +9, pollaco -10, mojomunkeez +16

this man is called "IDIOT"

Base +1, bucket90 -6, trinitity -9

Source please ?

Base +7, bucket90 +6