My first 8 pages rewrite.

Rearrange from a story by Goban published in Comic Hotmilk (october 2014).

You can read my other stories on tumblr : http://hentai-stories.tumblr.com

[Goban] Renai Katekyo + Secret Study [English] [Team Koinaka]
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Rewrite, in 2015? Fan of olddog51 confirmed.

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I'm going to be honest. Your english is just horrible. You should look into finding some proofreaders in the forums.

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Aside from what mysteriousstranger3 already pointed out: What exactly is the point of rewrites anyway?

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I really need to start refining my searches.

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lmao this shit rewrite a story

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The silver lining is that it brought this great manga to my attention, so I can go and browse the REAL translation.

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ugh that was horrible

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@Petsura - The point of a rewrite is to bring decent dialogue to works with good art but cringe inducing prose. Given that the original dialogue surpassed this by a large margin ...

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Your translation is terrible.And all big breast, large breast and huge breasts in anime/hentai are real!

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And hopefully your last.

Literally anything else would be a better use of your time.

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be honest , you're horrible than CGrascal and you're ruined the good doujin
I laughed so hard to your English than being aroused

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