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Just to be clear, I added "creativity" in a few bubbles. You'll know which ones when you read them.

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So? Her prophecy come true?

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@shakuganaexa

I appreciate your efforts but there's creativity, and then there's making up entire dialogues that bear no resemblance to the original Japanese text.
Page 13, for example. Can you even read Japanese?

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The translation seems to be largely spot on based on the few pages I skimmed but as Westing has mentioned, too much unneeded stuff has been added. Page 6 is another example. The speech bubble on the bottom right of the top right panel was just the guy whistling/similar sound effect in the RAWs but after translation it turned into a dialogue?

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I love Sora so much that I want to kill her to put into my bag.

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Netorare stories deserve dumb rewrite like this

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