raw /g/907187/a58482de91/

Base +64, Jago Smith -6, Bui +13, Chilla4000 +16, Lostalgia +6, jfragrettel +7, zykyne +7

What a sad and unsatisfying story.

Base +9, Jago Smith +6, Granten +7, Gitami +10, Ooe Kintarou +4, Bui -13, Wilfriback +11, Mitsutsubo +8, Darkestvamp +7, monocle89 +7, kuriosos +6, blagblag +7, MaouMaou +9, and 55 more...

That was just short and sad.

Base +6, Granten +7, Ooe Kintarou +4, Mitsutsubo +8, Darkestvamp +7, monocle89 +7, MaouMaou +9, zinos6 +8, ilovethishit +6, Jadia +7, Plzensky Prazdroj -6, AntiShisno +7, ryugenzawa +11, and 27 more...

I feel like the artist wanted to play with the cliche of weak slime monsters that can be easily one-hitted and instead followed the Hentai cliche that female warriors can't beat anything, no matter how weak it is.

Base +11, Ooe Kintarou +4, Bui -13, Wilfriback +11, Mitsutsubo +8, MaouMaou +9, AhKai +6, HelmutRegner -6, Quantequila +4, Thanks +7, Volttekka -6, endwar614 +5, Ligera -6, and 9 more...

Really.... sad. I'm actually really disturbed by the fact that the sister just killed just like that.

Base +7, Wilfriback +11, Darkestvamp +7, MaouMaou +9, Kighte +6, zinos6 +8, ilovethishit +6, Jadia +7, Not Important +7, Sebos +7, Plzensky Prazdroj -6, AntiShisno +7, ryugenzawa +11, and 23 more...

Wow, so short and kinda effed up. Does this count as snuff?

Base +7, Wilfriback +11, Darkestvamp +7, MaouMaou +9, zinos6 +8, ilovethishit +6, Ooe Kintarou +4, AntiShisno +7, banjomarx +6, Volttekka +6, endwar614 +5, Quantequila +4, codywelch +6, and 11 more...

Good art, terrible story. Now I am sad. Sad and limp.

Base +6, Wilfriback +11, Darkestvamp +7, newguy2012a +10, MaouMaou +9, Xcuter +6, wisky_t +6, zinos6 +8, ilovethishit +6, Bio-Hazard +5, Ooe Kintarou +4, AntiShisno +7, ryugenzawa +11, and 25 more...

Upsetting when good art has a sad story to tell.

Base +5, zinos6 +8, Ooe Kintarou +4, Volttekka -6, Ligera -6, jsnormandy +7

OH GOD THIS IS DARK

Base +6, Ooe Kintarou +4, Volttekka +6, Reich123 +5, Zero225 +9, Anony12788 +9, jfragrettel +7, Aryzkontol +6, ccbb +6, Qwerty Bam +5, J Shadow +5

Man, this kind of sad stories just instantly kills the boner.

Base +9, Ooe Kintarou +4, Volttekka +6, dracodragon +6, Quantequila +4, Anony12788 +9, jfragrettel +7, Qwerty Bam +5, jsnormandy +7

Oh god. Until 2nd page it was interesting but at 3rd? .....this is messed up. Oyster level messed up.

Base +7, zinos6 +8, Ooe Kintarou +4, N.Rin +6, Volttekka +6, Quantequila +4, Anony12788 +9, Megaton +18, jfragrettel +7, Qwerty Bam +5, jsnormandy +7

Disgusting. I hate this kind of story.

Base +6, Bio-Hazard +5, Not Important +7, Volttekka +6, Ligera -6, Quantequila +4, Soltrina -6, Anony12788 +9, jfragrettel +7, dexetus -6, desilvaT -5, Qwerty Bam +5, Dash-Dash-Dash +7

The fuck? That was it? At least add some sex in there.

Base +11, Ooe Kintarou +4, Thanks +7, Volttekka -6, Reich123 +5, jfragrettel +7, WiND221 +4, Qwerty Bam +5

Shortest Twilight Zone story ever.

Base +13, Ooe Kintarou +4, Goronta +6, Volttekka +6, Cypher1221 +7, Soldier A +6, Anony12788 +9, jfragrettel +7, desilvaT +5, Qwerty Bam +5, jsnormandy +7, Romi the Byzantine +7, J Shadow +6, and 1 more...

That's it? Where's the rest of it? Just when it was getting good...

Base +7, Volttekka -6, Quantequila -4, scooter1171 -20, WiND221 +4, desilvaT +5, Bui +13, Vonsta +2

I dunno I liked it. Possession normally gets a bad end anyway.

Base +6, Ooe Kintarou +4, Volttekka -6, theusername1 +6, faggotop +6, Soltrina +6, jfragrettel +7, WiND221 +4, desilvaT +5, Bui +13, ccbb +6, zykyne +7, J Shadow +5

Nice art and interesting concept, but yeah...that ending is a little messed up.

Base +7, Ooe Kintarou +4, Volttekka +6, jfragrettel +7

The third page was... ah forget it...

Base +5, Ooe Kintarou +4, Volttekka +6, faggotop +6, jfragrettel +7, Qwerty Bam +5

I know this sort of thing isn't for most people, but I quite enjoyed it! I'd be very interested to see if the author has more like this. There's just something very intriguing about stories like this with characters tricked into unknowlingly killing someone they care about...especially as abruptly as this.

Base +6, Volttekka -6, Soltrina +6, WiND221 +4, desilvaT +5, Bui +13, Violastrings +6

I love this type of stories

Base +6, Volttekka -6, destroyshy +6, Quantequila -4, faggotop +6, Soltrina +6, jfragrettel +7, Bui +13, Qwerty Bam +5, iMajinasi +3

Are those tags really appropriate here?

Snuff - it's not a person getting killed, image-wise, just slime. https://ehwiki.org/wiki/snuff

Mind break - nobody is being turned into a sex slave https://ehwiki.org/wiki/mind_break

giantess - where? https://ehwiki.org/wiki/giantess

minigirl - where? https://ehwiki.org/wiki/minigirl
If they don't have sex, we don't tag them!

male:monster - where? sigh

Also this is a non-h gallery, no sex or full frontal nudity

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On another topic, to quote someone from the RAW comments: "You realise this is only a bit of the story? the full story is in a new doujin, you can find this doujin via @jackfish who has the link to buy the entire doujin, contains alot of tsf/tg content"

Base +52, Volttekka -6, destroyshy -6, Cypher1221 +7, Quantequila -4, ensane +9, Ooe Kintarou -4, jfragrettel +7, Chilla4000 +16, version365 +9, J Shadow -5, dersied -10, Lao Shan Long +6, and 1 more...

>On another topic, to quote someone from the RAW comments: "You realise this is only a bit of the story? the full story is in a new doujin, you can find this doujin via @jackfish who has the link to buy the entire doujin, contains alot of tsf/tg content"

@Red_Piotrus
Did you at least verify the comment? It was a false lead, most likely because the commenter didn't follow through with looking. I've been through his twitter (@jackfish168) where @amulai retweeted on Feb 13 the link which referenced a completely unrelated doujin RJ171946 on DLSite which you all can find here: /g/906412/719cf33b54/ .

Base +11, Lin84210 +5, Ooe Kintarou +4, jfragrettel +7, Chilla4000 +16, Qwerty Bam +5

Great job
Nice translation

Base +3

@turkranma- I agree with you that, yes, no one died and it's fiction; however, you lose an argument when you attack your opponent's character. In other words, when you call someone that disagrees with you a 'pussy', you commit the Logical Fallacy called 'ad hominem'. It destroys the basis of your argument. The best way to deal with those you disagree with is to call into question the validity of their statement. You do that to some extent in your second and third sentences, except, once again, you call them dipshits, which further weakens any attempt at being taken seriously. Just thought you should know. People are free to dislike and to like work such as these. Just keep your potshots at what they say and not at the person.
Now to irritate everyone else. I am kidding. Only half of you will down vote me. It seems to me that there is a bias in the comments section. A bias to allow comments that approve and to attack comments that disapprove. I don't care either way. Everyone is free to do what they want. It's just an observation.
I am sure you're all waiting breathlessly for my opinion of this work of art. It is true, I think the art is very good. As for the story, it felt incomplete. If it is true that there is more to be translated, then my opinion might improve. You don't get to know the Onee-chan long enough to form an attachment, so I felt very little when she was sliced. Also, the details with how she and the slime trade places is weak, really weak. Lastly, where is the sex. For the art, I would give this 4 out of 5 stars; whereas, the story gets 2 out of 5 stars. Now, I'll be lucky if it is only half, Hah!

Base +12, Cypher1221 +7, CantThinkOfaName. -6, hibikiyamada -7, PersonaFan08 +16, Ooe Kintarou +4, jfragrettel +7, Bui +13, dersied -10

Now I feel the dark side of the force...
It seems that many people are damaged with a force lightning.
Who can heal the people?

Base +17, jfragrettel +7

I want to know the slime's story, if he has one and isn't just a random monster. Maybe he's a survivor of a slime/monster massacre that what's-her-tits was involved in and he came back for revenge once his abilities as a parasitic slime developed, stealing her body as part of some plan to both shame the heroine and help support slimes or monsters in general.

Base +6

@Red Piotrus
From the tag definition for slime: "Any gooey / gelatinous substances involved sexually. A slime-based creature necessitates both this and the monster tag." So upvote the male:monster tag again.
Also, there is no "full version" of this. Quit being a smartass that repeats false statements without even verifying them

Base +11, Lin84210 +5, jfragrettel +7, dersied +10

Well damn. That went bad really quickly.

Base +11, jfragrettel +7

Here, let me write a better ending: sister-soul-slime evolves into sister-shaped-slime, now he has TWO SISTERS! And they fuck. And everyone lived happily ever after.

Base +6

Jesus, that was short and dark. I feel sorry for that poor kid, the first "monster" he killed was his sister.

Last edited on 01 April 2016, 14:49 UTC.

Base +6

Oh hey, new DATE.

Base +6, WiND221 +4, destroyshy +6

Seems like a lot of people didn't take a look at the raw.

Base +6

@Red_Piotrus Please don't use sources without checking them, the symbolic moderator base bonus is sad when you do this.

Directly from http://okashi.blog6.fc2.com/blog-entry-17431.html:
つっきーさんに描いて貰いました！全３ページです。
つっきーさんのＤＬ同人誌 女の心をおっさん化するカメラ 324円 もよろしくです！

Even the title of the blog article is enough.
女勇者の弟、はじめての戦果 by.つっきー ①②③＜完＞

Base +35

Reminds me of jpeg's swap app doujin where the MC swaps a girl with a caterpillar and the "girl" immediately flails around and steps on the "caterpillar" afterwards...

This is the entire thing. People who don't know Japanese really shouldn't say shit out of their ass. The blog post specifically says its 3 pages and thats all of it. He then goes on to mention that Jackfish ALSO has a doujin called "Onna no kokoro wo ossan-ka-suru kamera" which loosely translates to "Camera that gives women the heart of an old guy"

Last edited on 08 April 2016, 11:50 UTC.

Base +6, fine17 +6

Good but too short.

Base +3

(After reading the end) This is so sad Alexa play despasito

Base +1