https://www.dlsite.com/maniax/work/=/product_id/RJ214255.html

RAW /g/1570491/62b4f0312d/

This TL is worse than google translate lol.

Base +29, CanIaxeyouaquestion +12, Vilis +26, randomsomething +6, Pataplouf +16, Shinsakusakulover +8, skual +7, kos111 +4, bigscuba +5, Hawlc +6, Myrkky69 +6, CheshireSquirrel +7, Animefan268 +6, and 14 more...

this translation hurt my eyes

Base +6, skual +7, BugKnot +8, kos111 +4, Hawlc +6, clamdown +7, coleccionista903 +6, 2pointer +6, IncognitoMaud +6, Ryan WolF Thepram +12, Maxizin +6

Mine damage am brained

Base +6, blueperfection +7, clamdown +7, coleccionista903 +6, BaconBuddha +6, Maxizin +6, platzbo +9, Firemoko526 +4

>when the translator had a stroke right before getting to work

Base +5, clamdown +7, coleccionista903 +6, aroptua +6, 2pointer +6, Sekai seifuku +9, Draw99Gray +18, Whitu Piggu +7, IncognitoMaud +6, Maxizin +6, Firemoko526 +4

Who removed the bad grammar tag?

Base +6, 2pointer +6

we need a gibberish tag...

Base +6

Judging by the prequel at /g/1575832/414f6fa8cb/ I'm assuming this is an official translation from dlsite

The bad grammar tag was removed because there's no checklist in the comments. Since the tag requires 10 mistakes and this doujin is full of them, I'll only list 10.

Page 2
"Why is this place in estrus?"
- Probably technically correct, but weird. Replace "in estrus" with "hard"
"The crotch is touched by a real girl"
- Replace first few words with "My crotch is being touched"
"It's It's It's It's not a virgin!!!!!!!1"
- The "it's" should be "I'm"
- 1 shouldn't be there
"In recent years, virgins are only elementary school children"
- "In recent years, only elementary school children are virgins"
"Virginity was abandoned at the time of the kindergarten!"
- "I lost my virginity in kindergarten!"

Page 3
"I'm worried about the smell because it is a girl"
- Replace "it is" with "I'm"
"So you check my smell"
- Remove "you"
"I do not hit the punishment?"
- No idea what this is supposed to mean. Perhaps "I do not deserve this punishment"?

Page 4
"Why are the lower body things getting bigger and bigger?"
- Could probably just say "Why is this thing getting bigger and bigger?"
"Did you smell my sweat and feel like erotic? You are hentai!"
- Replace "feel like erotic" with something like "get turned on"
- "Hentai" should be translated into "a pervert"

Base +14, nemomaneo +5, BaconBuddha +6

This is unsalvagable gibberish.

Here's another attempt at translating it.
/g/1576888/494730b811/

Base +6, BaconBuddha +6

It is mineral water HAHAHA

Base +8